Poet's Corner

[History Of Flowers]

To try to revive this thread- here's a question for you: What's your LEAST favorite format/rhyme scheme/style/whatever of poetry?

I dislike paragraph formatting (doesn't really seem like poetry that way) and aabb (almost always sounds cheesy)

I've noticed a sudden cropping of that on here, I loathe it. Especially when there are no noticable breaks, and the ones in paragraph format that dont even rhyme. Its not a poem..its just a weird little paragraph thing.

[burkenstock1414]

I've noticed a sudden cropping of that on here, I loathe it. Especially when there are no noticable breaks, and the ones in paragraph format that dont even rhyme. Its not a poem..its just a weird little paragraph thing.

actually if it is done right it is poetry. There has been a new outburst of this espec. on the slam scene. It is called Prosetry. Lots of people dont do it right though espec. on here but when it is done correctly it is rather refreshing. And also ...jsut because it doesnt rhyme...doesnt mean it isnt poetry. : )

[History Of Flowers]

actually if it is done right it is poetry. There has been a new outburst of this espec. on the slam scene. It is called Prosetry. Lots of people dont do it right though espec. on here but when it is done correctly it is rather refreshing. And also ...jsut because it doesnt rhyme...doesnt mean it isnt poetry. : )

I know, but barely anyone here seems capable of anything else.

[burkenstock1414]

actually i bet lots of people would be capable but everyone is so closed minded or simply dont know that poetry DOES NOT HAVE TO RHYME for it to be GOOD poetry. They try and model themselves from authors like Poe...which Poe is amazing but he also wrote for a certain time period...ah- well what can you do...o well.

[Paradox]

actually i bet lots of people would be capable but everyone is so closed minded or simply dont know that poetry DOES NOT HAVE TO RHYME for it to be GOOD poetry. They try and model themselves from authors like Poe...which Poe is amazing but he also wrote for a certain time period...ah- well what can you do...o well.

Some have tried, but it doesn't improve the quality of some of the poetry on here.

[SempreStaccato]

http://www.myjellybean.com/chat/showthread.php?t=333409

I dont know if that worked, but I really need critique on these two and to know which ones better.

[misshady]

oooh! rate mine or w/e

here' some i wrote, i kno i'm not that good, but, eh, o well:

numero uno:

Faint sound of your voice lays awake in my head,
I keep my feelings shut,
While pretending you’re dead
My time’s in a bottle,
Along with my soul,
Have I not tried everything to make me whole?
I’m tryin to forget you while I sit in this hall,
Yet you stay in my mind without a call
Where’s the Priscilla that’s so calm, so cool,
No lover’s fool?
I never thought it would come to this,
But she’s gone,
Drowned by your kiss
So I’ll close my eyes and forget all about you, tonight......

numero dos:

Breathless when I’m with you
Probably never felt that way.
When we're together its like we're in our zone,
A reflection of self,
On our own.
I try to give myself a chance to seek for sunlight without your boundaries,
But I keep wanting you to bring me all your sweet dreams and heart melodies.
if you ever leave me I’ll drown in tears.
If you deceive it'll be just u all these years.
You can remember what’s left behind,
But you'll never find it once its gone, so hold on........
Or carry on

numero thres:

Christmas is a time of lots of joys,
A time to fill stockings with toys,

A time of happiness, a time of cheer,
A time to imagine St. Nick's white beard,

A time when families gather together,
A time to stay warm during the cold winter weather,

A time to laugh and to sing,
A time to hear those sleigh bells ring,
season is fun and nice,
But the true meaning of Christmas
Is to Celebrate the Birth of Christ!

The Christmas
numero cuatro:

I've wasted my time with you,
Waiting for your love
When all this time, I was by your side,
You only looked above
I walked the line,
Even though you weren't kind,
Just remember that, before I’m gone
Before I leave, I need to say,
That I gave you my everything,
In every way.
So while I cry, I’ll say good-bye,
And never say your name.

these are two that i'm working on:

numero cinco:

Looking for happiness outside from my dreams
Can’t find what I’m looking for
Never will with these schemes
Wishing the rain would stop, so I can walk in the sun,
To try to make myself happy, without my loved one
Tryna stop loving you but my heart won’t permit,
How come my mind won’t get out of this pit??

numero seis:
You’ll never know about all the rainbows and butterflies in the sky.
The dream, the chance, the hope that dies.
You’ll never know until you realize.

[misshady]

EDIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! READ THIS ONE INSTEAD OF THE OTHER 1. FOR SOME ****TY REASON I CAN'T EDIT THE OTHER ONE.

oooh! rate mine or w/e

here' some i wrote, i kno i'm not that good, but, eh, o well:

numero uno:

Faint sound of your voice lays awake in my head,
I keep my feelings shut,
While pretending you’re dead
My time’s in a bottle,
Along with my soul,
Have I not tried everything to make me whole?
I’m tryin to forget you while I sit in this hall,
Yet you stay in my mind without a call
Where’s the Priscilla that’s so calm, so cool,
No lover’s fool?
I never thought it would come to this,
But she’s gone,
Drowned by your kiss
Looking for happiness outside from my dreams
Can’t find what I’m looking for
Never will with these schemes
Wishing the rain would stop, so I can walk in the sun,
To try to make myself happy, without my loved one
Tryna stop loving you but my heart won’t permit,
How come my mind won’t get out of this pit??
So I’ll close my eyes and forget all about you, tonight......

numero dos:

Breathless when I’m with you
Probably never felt that way.
When we're together its like we're in our zone,
A reflection of self,
On our own.
I try to give myself a chance to seek for sunlight without your boundaries,
But I keep wanting you to bring me all your sweet dreams and heart melodies.
if you ever leave me I’ll drown in tears.
If you deceive it'll be just u all these years.
You can remember what’s left behind,
But you'll never find it once its gone, so hold on........
Or carry on

numero thres:

Christmas is a time of lots of joys,
A time to fill stockings with toys,

A time of happiness, a time of cheer,
A time to imagine St. Nick's white beard,

A time when families gather together,
A time to stay warm during the cold winter weather,

A time to laugh and to sing,
A time to hear those sleigh bells ring,
season is fun and nice,
But the true meaning of Christmas
Is to Celebrate the Birth of Christ!

The Christmas

numero cuatro:

I've wasted my time with you,
Waiting for your love
When all this time, I was by your side,
You only looked above
I walked the line,
Even though you weren't kind,
Just remember that, before I’m gone
Before I leave, I need to say,
That I gave you my everything,
In every way.
So while I cry, I’ll say good-bye,
And never say your name.

this is one i'm working on:

numero cinco:

You’ll never know about all the rainbows and butterflies in the sky.
The dream, the chance, the hope that dies.
You’ll never know until you realize.

[Synh]

I know, but barely anyone here seems capable of anything else.

like me... haha


A world of war
The peace is missing
Victims bawl and cry
But no one’s listening

Forgotten are the dead
None seem to care
That they gave their lives
So that we may still be here

Our country is at war
Skirmishing for peace
Don’t they realize
This fight will never cease?

The cause isn’t reachable
Lives are wasted endlessly
Fighting for something that doesn’t exist
Is dim as far as I can see

I ponder this thought
Wonder how could this all be
And fall asleep every night
Wishing I would wake from this dream

[DragonEyes]

I'm a new person willing to try out poetry. I want an honest criticism reply please.

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Everyday the world seems to be changing
Changing into a world with no peace
You hear about it everyday
The wars never seem to cease
You just can't get away

All I want is peace throughout the world
Not just in one country
Not in two
But, all of them
Just between me and you

I can't remember the last time where there were no wars
I can't remember back to the time where people got along
Back when race didn't matter
The only thing I can do is scream
Scream and imagine a better world
The wars will never rest as is seems

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I don't know....I really don't like it..What do you think?

[Synh]

I'm a new person willing to try out poetry. I want an honest criticism reply please.

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Everyday the world seems to be changing
Changing into a world with no peace
You hear about it everyday
The wars never seem to cease
You just can't get away

All I want is peace throughout the world
Not just in one country
Not in two
But, all of them
Just between me and you

I can't remember the last time where there were no wars
I can't remember back to the time where people got along
Back when race didn't matter
The only thing I can do is scream
Scream and imagine a better world
The wars will never rest as is seems

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I don't know....I really don't like it..What do you think?

It's okay... it sounds like you didnt put much heart into it but rather you just went in search of words that rhymed.

[OnceUponATime♥]

i want an honest opinion on my poem please. THANX

Untitled

i cant believe it
it's happened once more
another one died
another knock on heavens door

theres been too many to count
deaths of young adults
we all take life for granted
and look at the results

she was only a teenager
graduating this year
one ride in a friends car
leaves everyone in tears.

this is getting too close to home
too many i have seen passed
why is it so hard
to make a life last?

you'll be deeply missed
this i can say is true
you'll be in our hearts
our tears forever with you.

RIP Carly!

[DragonEyes]

It's okay... it sounds like you didnt put much heart into it but rather you just went in search of words that rhymed.

I agree with you..I just started writing poetry again awhile ago and, What do you know, I'm published. I took your advice and tried something new. Thanks much!

[Synh]

I agree with you..I just started writing poetry again awhile ago and, What do you know, I'm published. I took your advice and tried something new. Thanks much!

Really? Cool. What poem(s) got published? Could I read it? And in what book?

[psycho08chick05]

hey i was wonderi...what do yall do like when all you can do is write poems? i mean i will try to do my school work *tried when school was in session its summer break now but still* and i end up just writing poems and dont even realize im doing it. i have over 451 poems that i wrote in school alone...